Thursday, March 3, 2011

Lindsey Extra Credit

Lindsey Schrock
English 3 AP
Mr. Soeth, per. 2
REHUGO Analysis: Extra Credit Essay
A. “The New Community” by Amitai Etzioni
B. While there are differing aspects of a society and a community, it is essential for America to attain characteristics of both in order to achieve a comprehensive, successful, and effective sense of belonging and familiarity. Etzioni argues that due to urbanization and a shift from rural areas, regions nationwide began lacking such a sense of community. As a call to action, he challenges Americans to combine a society and community in order to create an entity where people know their neighbors and where diversity and unity are equally balanced. He supports his argument by providing examples of how areas in America are already exhibiting signs of budding interests in social relationships and communities based off of relations and bondage.
C. Evidence
            1. Ethos: Multiple resources contribute greatly to the content of the article, and serve as a rather large piece of rhetorical evidence that therefore strengthens the author’s argument. Etzioni efficaciously develops credibility by referring to research and opinions expressed by reputable sources such as Herbert Gans, a Columbia University sociologist; Ray Oldenburg, a well-known and respectable author; and several other works created by numerous experts and researchers. These resources act as foundations for Etzioni’s chief arguments, thus emphasizing the amount of reliable research that supports his statements and effectively persuading readers to adhere to his perspective.
            2. Logos: In paragraph seventeen, Etzioni utilizes data gathered from research in order to further enforce his opinions. He states, “On average…the whole country moves about once every five years…in recent years Americans seem to move somewhat less often…One explanation is a growing desire to maintain the bonds of friendship and local social roots.” This is used to further solidify his argument that America is attempting to develop a community that is a balance of diversity and unity; one that exhibits a sense of familiarity. This is achieved, as stated in the data, by planting one’s ‘roots’ in a town or society. In paragraphs twelve through eighteen, Etzioni also appeals to logos by answering a series of rhetorical questions addressed in paragraph eleven. By thoroughly answering each question to its full extent through the indicative process of attacking one issue at a time, the audience is exposed to a sense of logic, thus making Etzioni’s position and point of view more ckear and stable.
D. Rhetorical Strategies
            1. Exemplification: The author provides a series of examples in order to reinforce his accounts of American communities. In paragraph nineteen, Etzioni illustrates the burgeoning sense of community instituting itself in college and high school campuses and law firms. In doing so, he substantiates that communities are strengthened by merely spending time daily with other members of that society.
            2. Comparison and Contrast: The juxtaposition of multiple terms throughout the selection serves as a key feature of Etzioni’s argumentative style. In the beginning of the passage, he defines the opposing German terms “gemeinschaft” and “gesellschaft” in order to show the differences between a society and a community. The article comes to a full circle as Etzioni revisits this juxtaposition in the concluding paragraph of his work, thus emphasizing how having just one of these characteristics does not ensure a close-knit community, but a balance between the two creates an ideal ‘system.’ In describing the history and ‘evolution’ of American communities, Etzioni also compares societal trends present in the eighties, and those practiced in the nineties. He characterizes these eras through the use and juxtaposition of the terms “me-ism” and “we-ness” in paragraphs eight and nine. The provided description of the eighties suggests a time period in which self-concern governed any other prospective community needs. The nineties, however, signifies a time of unity and ‘togetherness’ practiced by members of society and politics alike. These comparisons build up to Etzioni’s argument that new communities can be modern, not fashioned after the past, and can exhibit characteristics of both community and society.
Etzioni, Amitai. "The New Community." The Language of Composition. Boston: Bedford/St. Martin's, 2008. 289-94. Print.

Extra Credit

myrna Nashed
Mr. Soeth
English 3AP
March 1, 2011


A. “Commencement Speech at Mount Holyoke College”- Anna Quindlen

B. Anna Quindlen expresses that being prefect is exhausting work, and how year after year she would try to maintain being perfect but came to the conclusion that she “is giving up on being perfect and beginning the work of becoming yourself.” She also states that it’s more difficult to be yourself now because of how cultures work, that we should set aside the “traditional notions” and start making choices for ourselves and what seems fit for us.

C. Quindlen expresses ethos by quoting Lily Tommy saying “If you win the rat race, you’re still a rat,” explaining that no matter how much you strive, if you strive to be successful and you don’t believe in yourself then you won’t be successful at all, you’ll be just as ordinary as everyone else. This quote also represents Quindlen’s point because she is trying to prove that life isn’t just about work and being successful because not matter what you’ll be as ordinary as everyone else but what makes you extraordinary is when you decide to become yourself and be “successful on your own terms.” “Eventually being perfect day after day, year after year, became like always carrying a backpack filled with bricks on my back. And oh, how I secretly longed to lay my burden down.” Quindlen relates this, by pronouncing pathos, to numerous people who have been for countless years trying to be perfect. She sympathizes with those who are trying to be perfect, reaching out, and criticizing the burdens of “carrying a backpack filled with bricks.”

D. “Take if from someone who has left the backpack full of bricks far behind. Everyday feels light as a feather.” Quindlen uses a metaphor and parallelism, describing of how her days are now lighter than a feather and she had also opened her statement with carrying a heavy burden of being constantly perfect but now it’s gone; since she can to realization of, being perfect isn’t going to make you successful in life as long as you are not please with yourself. “But I can tell you this about her without question: she was perfect. Let me be very clear what I mean by that. I mean that I got up every day and tired to be perfect in every possible way. If there was a test to be had, I studied for it; if there was a paper to be written, it was done. I smiled at everyone in the dorm hallways…..I can tell you today what I did them to be perfect, in every way possible.” Quindlen defines perfect in her own way stating that being perfect to her met that she had studied for every test on time and do every assignment that was due and to be friendly in front of everyone.

Extra Credit

myrna nashed
Mr. Soeth
English 3AP
March 1, 2011

A. Martin Luther King Jr.- “I Have a Dream”

B. In 1963 racial discrimination set nationwide rage and protesting. This speech was given near the Lincoln Memorial on August 28, 1963 in attempt to open peoples’ eyes to the realization that their freedom in the society was “chained by discrimination.”

C. Martin Luther King Jr. does an outstanding job in opening people’s eyes because he’s trying to get not only African Americans but also white men to join and become as one whole community. King directly tells them that they have to fight for equality because they have been discriminated against for hundreds of years but his intentions are good, wanting to give them hope to end all the tribulations that they have been through. King also uses repetition such as “One hundred years” emphasizing that this is not just about now, but it’s been happening for years. That it’s not just about generations now, but generations to come.

D. “In a sense we've come to our nation's capital to cash a check. When the architects of our republic wrote the magnificent words of the Constitution and the Declaration of Independence, they were signing a promissory note to which every American was to fall heir. This note was a promise that all men, yes, black men as well as white men, would be guaranteed the "unalienable Rights" of "Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness."….. Instead of honoring this sacred obligation, America has given the Negro people a bad check, a check which has come back marked "insufficient funds." In this passage King uses the metaphor that African Americans have come to receive what numerous people have come to America to gain, which the forefathers wrote in the Declaration of Independent “Life Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness” but when they did come to receive this “check” in hope of greater and better things, America gave them false hope by a “bad check” raising African Americans expectations, then suddenly telling them that they don’t have enough by marking the check as “insufficient,” as to tell them that they don’t have as much as equal rights as the whites do.
“There are those who are asking the devotees of civil rights, "When will you be satisfied?" We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of police brutality. We can never be satisfied as long as ….cannot gain lodging in the motels of the highways and the hotels of the cities. ….We can never be satisfied as long as our children are stripped of their self-hood and robbed of their dignity by signs stating: "For Whites Only." We cannot be satisfied as long as a Negro in Mississippi cannot vote and a Negro in New York believes he has nothing for which to vote. No, no, we are not satisfied, and we will not be satisfied until "justice rolls down like waters, and righteousness like a mighty stream." King exclaims that injustice is everywhere in the cities and they will not seize to stop protesting until their voice has been heard by using repetition, saying that they will never be satisfied until things change for the better. King states that they will keep fighting for their rights until they win, and in the last sentence he uses a metaphor explaining that they will not stop challenging the law, till they have justice. These statements show that King was not just trying to prove a point but to encourage African Americans to keep on fighting for equality, in their communities.

• "American Rhetoric: Martin Luther King, Jr. - I Have a Dream." American Rhetoric: The Power of Oratory in the United States. Web. 02 Mar. 2011. .
• "I Have A Dream" Speech (1963)." Welcome to ClassBrain.com. Web. 02 Mar. 2011. .

Extra Credit


Destiny Ornelas
Mr. Soeth
English 3AP
March 1, 2011
REHUGO Analysis: History – speech
A.      Martin Luther King Jr. gives his speech, “I Have A Dream,” on August 28 1963 to end segregation and try to bring the nation together as a whole.
B.      Suffering from segregation his whole life, Martin Luther King uses his own experiences and experiences that every African American has to go through to show his audience how segregation is unlawful and unjust.  Martin Luther King wants the nation to not overlook this very serious condition and realize that segregation needs to be ended in order to protect the rights of all Americans.
C.       King does an excellent job at effectively showing his audience how discrimination should be abolished and equality should be established. He explains how “rights of life, liberty, and the  pursuit of happiness” were given to Americans, but the discrimination in the world has prevented African Americans from receiving their “unalienable rights.” He tells how the “Negros discontent will not pass” if the nation overlooks this urgent situation and that if America really is a great nation they will live by the saying that all men, black or white, are created equal .
D.      King shows that America took a step forward in racial equality and gave millions of people hope by alluding to the Emancipation Proclamation, but then he makes his audience realize that even though that was a great thing in history, we took a step back because segregation prevents African Americans from having the same rights that White Americans do. He also alludes to the Constitution and the Declaration of Independence to show that the “architects of our republic” wrote these things to ensure “unalienable rights” to all men, both white and black, but this terrible segregation is, again, holding back African Americans from having the same equal rights. Since King has been living with discrimination his whole life, he exemplifies segregation by using examples like “black men’s voting rights” and “white men’s signs” to show his white audience more specifically how it is to live in a segregated world where an African American finds himself “an exile in his own land.”

Extra Credit


Destiny Ornelas
Mr. Soeth
English 3AP
March 3, 2011
REHUGO Analysis: Extra Credit Visual
A.      Cartoon attached
B.      Smeltzer is commenting on the impact that electronics and videogames have on children’s lives.
C.      Smeltzer effectively shows the transition from the average child’s daily activities sitting in front of the television playing PlayStation rather than playing a sport or hanging out with friends like their parents did at their age. He does this by having the mother in the picture saying “How was your day at the PlayStation?” instead of asking something more expected from a mother like “How was your day at school?”
D.      Before such advanced technologies were available to the average families, a common question that would be asked at the dinner table would be something regarding an activity done during the child’s day. However, now that electronics are accessible to children, Smeltzer is implying that the common question asked during dinner time would be “how was your day at the PlayStation?” instead.

           

Smeltzer, Steve.  Day At The Playstation. Smeltzer Cartoons.www.SmeltzerCartoons.com.